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Kiss
04-16-2008, 08:03 AM
On The Line
Lives on the line
Thats a horrid sign
Children leaving
Parents weeping
To heaven or hell
None can tell
Holding to the beat
Anxiously sitting on your seat
Don't leave me
I can't live with-out you, you see
A tickling feeling once they die
They have breathed there last breath and held there last sigh

Ghost
04-16-2008, 08:10 AM
that is great. i could never do that. you could put it in a newpaper or something :)

Kiss
04-16-2008, 08:12 AM
I hog the paper enough due academic success.

Scott
04-16-2008, 02:27 PM
That's pretty good. Not as good as the one that sounded like you were suicidal though.

Raw!
04-17-2008, 04:31 PM
Umm.. one question.. are you emo?
Cause if you are, I have a song for you!

But, you make good poem's I guess.

Samus-Fan
04-17-2008, 04:47 PM
I like it. I'm not a big fan for ABAB, but if it works for you. I like having weird patterns, like ABCDEAEBCD. Of course, I don't write poetry, unless it is for school.

Kiss
04-17-2008, 05:04 PM
Naw, but i seem to write emo stuff.