What do you guys think of these graphics?

[Valkyrie Dimension]

For those that have played Dance Dance Revolution X2 (AC JP) or Dance Dance Revolution II (Wii USA) and have unlocked everything you should know the song, "New Decade" by Sota F. If you haven't, you can listen to it here.
Anyway, in the Dance Dance Revolution games, the songs have a pair of graphics: A 256x80 Banner with the title of the song and the name of the artist, and a 640x480 Background with just the title of the song. The official graphics for this song are the following:


So, today I was bored and I was listening to this song. I made custom graphics to the song, which are the following:


Okay, with that rant out of the way, the main point of this thread is feedback for my graphics (the second pair). I want to know how I can improve.
Thanks!

[thedeparted]

very eye popping..